Magus and his skythe

Myth_Object · Post by **Myth_Object** » Mon May 14, 2007 8:11 pm

Magus ,Magus underworld mage,
Magus ,Magus, your like a sage,
You carry a scythe, you live on a pike.
Magus ,Magus You do engage
in combat like a wombat.
as I sat in my chair playing Chrono Trigger,
I noticed Magus started to get bigger,
with his skythe, he made an incredible
heigh to the blue blue sky.
Magus, Magus, your not skankous,
your ambitious, like my fishes in my tank,
filled with dank.
Magus you are.....
A skyther like the sky.

-End of poem-

What you guys think?

destroyer69 · Post by **destroyer69** » Mon May 14, 2007 8:24 pm

Too many commas for my taste.

Myth_Object · Post by **Myth_Object** » Mon May 14, 2007 9:05 pm

it's s'pose to be like that, it's a poem!

Ombre · Post by **Ombre** » Mon May 14, 2007 9:45 pm

Sounds like one of those lame theme songs they have for those crappy Saturday cartoons.

Myth_Object · Post by **Myth_Object** » Mon May 14, 2007 10:14 pm

well it's my first, but yeah, I was thinking real fast.

SingingBlaze · Post by **SingingBlaze** » Mon May 14, 2007 11:03 pm

Meant to have any meaning or nah?

SHOUTrvb · Post by **SHOUTrvb** » Tue May 15, 2007 5:23 am

/Waits for INSANEdrive to post.

GametagAeonFlux · Post by **GametagAeonFlux** » Tue May 15, 2007 6:55 am

Too many errors to allow for any sort of judgment.

Myth_Object · Post by **Myth_Object** » Tue May 15, 2007 4:50 pm

it's free style english. learn it in drama class.

GametagAeonFlux · Post by **GametagAeonFlux** » Tue May 15, 2007 4:58 pm

Myth_Object wrote:it's free style english. learn it in drama class.

Free style English doesn't mean you can spell words wrong...and there's no point in writing your comma's ,like this (and don't try to say it's for style, your poem is inconsistent in comma use).

I don't like the style, or the poem. Good day to you sir.

bibbit · Post by **bibbit** » Tue May 15, 2007 5:12 pm

Ombre wrote:Sounds like one of those lame theme songs they have for those crappy Saturday cartoons.

My thoughts exactly.

ninja modder · Post by **ninja modder** » Tue May 15, 2007 6:13 pm

it does kinda sound like a theme song....atleast its not liek emo poetry

good job?

an emo wrote
I want to kill myself
With a knife
Then roll around in blood
and die

I threatened
Im gonna fucking kill you

JK-47 · Post by **JK-47** » Tue May 15, 2007 9:27 pm

ninja modder wrote:it does kinda sound like a theme song....atleast its not liek emo poetry

good job?

an emo wrote
I want to kill myself
With a knife
Then roll around in blood
and die

I threatened
Im gonna *** kill you

While I agree that that poem (if it was a poem at all) was emo, I fucking hate it when people misinterperate a poem's message. Just because a poem has an inner meaning of pain and suffering (which every person goes through, that's life), some dumb ass points and calls it emo. I want to punch them in the fucking face every time I hear them yell that in my English class when my teacher or a student presents a poem about personal pain (which, I feel I have to remind you, everyone goes through pain. Some things you just can't tough out or brush off your shoulder).

That being said, your poem Mr. Myth is kind of... meh. I mean, I get the meaning and all...but it reminds me of the format rappers use for thier "songs" haha.

SHOUTrvb · Post by **SHOUTrvb** » Wed May 16, 2007 4:57 am

/Ignores other posts and proceeds to rant about none of the poems in this topic have any rhythm, or even rhyme that well. (Yes, I'm fully aware that not all poems have to rhyme, but when they are meant too, they need to rhyme well.)

galvination · Post by **galvination** » Thu May 17, 2007 11:33 am

skythe

WTF is a skythe?

Dan!! · Post by **Dan!!** » Thu May 17, 2007 2:17 pm

I don't get it.

Is this about Chrono Trigger?

EDIT: ah, honestly I only read about 4 lines. I'm not big into poetry and certainly not videogame poetry.

R.O.U.S. · Post by **R.O.U.S.** » Fri May 18, 2007 4:29 am

good game, bad poetry.

auerhantheman1 · Post by **auerhantheman1** » Fri May 18, 2007 11:53 am

Wombat? Skankous? Heigh? Dank? Somebody's been drinking too much eggnog.

JK-47 · Post by **JK-47** » Fri May 18, 2007 1:36 pm

auerhantheman1 wrote:Somebody's been drinking too much eggnog.

Wtf?

SHOUTrvb · Post by **SHOUTrvb** » Fri May 18, 2007 1:56 pm

Bad attempt at a joke.