This one is about Aliens (not the green dudes, the H.R. Giger ones, the ones with ripley in it)
Its going GREAT AS HELL! i read it, i had my brother read it, and my friend and they all give it a 2 thumbs up so far. I have 21 pages (on school paper) written and i am drawing the cover right now. Im not going to give up on this one, ill battle my way through hell to get this on the shelves of stores.
im not going to type up what i have so far for.....reasons, i dont want it copied.
ill tell you this much its called "Aliens: Deadly Fleet" FINE ill type up the introduction, its not important, it just introduces you to the aliens.
INTRODUCTION
It was dark, and it smelled of sulfur.
He was falling on his tracks on the wet, slimy structure in which his own nightmares were made of. There was a beam of light at the end of the hellish structure which warmed his body and soul. His ears were pounding from the explosions of guns and screams of creatures, creatures that are loyal to thier leader, thier "Queen". You dare not kill them, because by killing them, it could mean your own death traveling with them. They have green acid blood that will eat through anything, even the strongest ships metal and its reinforcement steel. Most of hte weapons you carry are rendered useless by thier armored, black, exo-skeloten, which had human like features, mixt with a gothic, machanic touch. Thier heads are curved back, looking like a roundish black bannana placed upsidedown on thier small fat necks.
He hears his fellow marines screaming thier last screams before a spider looking parasite wil be placed on thier faces, just like a person would put thier hand over your face wrapping thier long fingers through your hair, palm still on your face. They call it a Facehugger, it impregnates you with one of these devilish, hell hounds calld Drones, "The Queens Marines", in your chest behind your ribs, and when its ready, it will chew and burst its way through your rib cage. It looks like a long, tan colored snake-like creature with the alien head attached to it, with arms where they are usually located, connected to the shoulders. It chews through your muscles, and pushes its way through your skin. Of course this will be an extremely painful process, and when its done, you will sadly die. This creature is called a Chestburster, which will eventually grow into a drone, that will try and get you to be a host for another drone. All that is really going through thier head is "Be loyal to the queen, and dominate all life".
As he is running, the light gets brighter, the screams get louder from the drones, and his friends that he is betraying for his own life on instinct. He feels himself being uprooted from the ground by something behind him. He knows what it is.... He prays to god that the drone will kill him right on the spot, but when the done didnt the man screams and hits the alien and tries to agitate him so it will kill him, but the alien ignores it, for he knows what its species needs to expand.....Live Organisms.
The man is carried into the darnkess mourning the fact he had failes himself, he failed the crew he was sent to save from thier own deaths by these monsters, and worse, he failed life itself by allowing himself to become a host fore one of these, of these monsters.
THATS THE END until chapter 1 starts
how do you like it?
Edit: I just made a little 2 second roughdraft of what the cover is going to look like, no im not using hudson and that alien, its just a roughdraft.
that roughdraft was teh sux, heres a different one:
