Cortana: The Creation - Chapter 2

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Cortana: The Creation - Chapter 2

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Table of Contents:

-Prologue
-Chapter 1: Vanderbrook
-Chapter 2: All in a Days work


Cortana: The Creation

Prologue:

The year is 2105 Robert Stevenson was a revolutionary in neuro-science and a futurist. He controlled the company known as OPEN. The government controlled his funding, so it wasn
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So, um.. what?
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Hmm, well, I'm writing the first chapter. Just like a WIP. Post comments...
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I like it, Great job. You should really continue this, it's good!
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I count numerous grammar and punctuation errors.
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iGeo wrote:I count numerous grammar and punctuation errors.
Well Firefox says your name is spelled wrong ;o
This is pretty good, but why did you write it?
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iGeo wrote:I count numerous grammar and punctuation errors.
me too, but advance copies will fix that. (copies of the book are sent out before publication and read by people. it's like beta testing)

so far, so good. keep up the work.
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Chapter 1: Vanderbrook

Dr. Catherine Halsey entered the silent debriefing room. There were several men and women of the neuroscience community waiting here to hear what Catherine was about to say and do. They were all civilians, but unlike Halsey, they wore suites the closely resembled the type of suite an officer would wear aboard a ship. They were the handpicked men and women that Dr. Halsey chose to perform an operation that would create the first AI from a living person.
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Okay, I find myself very confused...
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With what?
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The entire thing. I just kind of skimmed through it, I'll try to find the time to read it all the way through tomorrow. :D
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I could understand it being confusing if you just skimmed.
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people more appreciate these book-type stuff over at the http://www.bungie.net forums.
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cortana is hot!
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Chapter 2: All in a Days Work

Tonegawa checked his experiment one last time. Everything had to be perfect, and the timing was critical.
Ding!
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cliffs pls k thnx
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Really cool, I always like to read up on why things where made, and you portrayed it very well.
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