Your current is much better. The render is way too focused on, and the background is way too blurred out. And near the bottom right corner I can see what appears to be the bottom left corner of a box. Also, the render looks kind of cartoonish, and it doesn't really fit the background as it looks more realistic.
7.5/10
Theirs something about i just don't like very much but i can't figure it out so it may just be personal taste. And my sig = pwnage but its a completly different style altogether.